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That's the forecast for the forecastable future -- showers and thundershowers as the warm and sun suck moisture out of our sodden lebensraum and turn it back into clouds. Plus, around Thursday, we have the opportunity to get the remnants of Alberto...
Along which lines, I'd imagine that folks (you know who you are) in Florida who were griping about a drought would have preferred to _not_ get all the rainfall deficit caught up in one day...
First feedback from Wife on SIGNATURES. She wants me to back off a bit on the bit about the narrator talking to the reader, "breaking the fourth wall" in theater parlance. Found it broke her concentration when I had Fat Wizard addressing "you" comments to her, from a world obviously not our own. (Like, we don't have forensic wizards on the local police force.) She says "you people" would probably work for her, as a reminder that he's talking to a fictitious audience _in that world_ rather than to her personally.
I'm thinking about it. Distancing the reader sets off a phobia reaction in me.
She also thinks it needs tightening in a few places. That's normal. The Nice Editor Lady used to chop a few thousand words out of my manuscripts, back when I had a Nice Editor Lady. That's why the reviewers get to say things like "tightly written." It's a code phrase for "tightly edited."
Along which lines, I'd imagine that folks (you know who you are) in Florida who were griping about a drought would have preferred to _not_ get all the rainfall deficit caught up in one day...
First feedback from Wife on SIGNATURES. She wants me to back off a bit on the bit about the narrator talking to the reader, "breaking the fourth wall" in theater parlance. Found it broke her concentration when I had Fat Wizard addressing "you" comments to her, from a world obviously not our own. (Like, we don't have forensic wizards on the local police force.) She says "you people" would probably work for her, as a reminder that he's talking to a fictitious audience _in that world_ rather than to her personally.
I'm thinking about it. Distancing the reader sets off a phobia reaction in me.
She also thinks it needs tightening in a few places. That's normal. The Nice Editor Lady used to chop a few thousand words out of my manuscripts, back when I had a Nice Editor Lady. That's why the reviewers get to say things like "tightly written." It's a code phrase for "tightly edited."
