Revision city

[jhetley]

Starting in on GHOST POINT this morning, most of the stuff is simple mechanics, like figuring out how to make sure the reader knows about a gap of time without the blatant "Two days later, as they headed down the road..." (Which actually could work in a lot of stories, but doesn't really fit this book's style, being more omniscient narrator-voice than really tight third-person.) I'm working from back to front -- that makes life easier for the intrepid author, as the Nice Agent Lady referenced page numbers, and some of my changes will throw those all to hell.

Which also means that the _hard_ part, the cuts in Grendel's POV, gets put off as long as possible, as those come in the first four or five chapters.

But I can use that as avoidance from scraping paint on the front porch. As Dante pointed out, there is a gradation to the circles in Hell.

And anyone who has a painless solution for evicting or eradicating a yellow-jacket nest from the compost bin, please raise your hand. I got stung three times yesterday evening. Good thing I'm not allergic to _that_.

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[green-knight.livejournal.com]

most of the stuff is simple mechanics, like figuring out how to make sure the reader knows about a gap of time without the blatant "Two days later, as they headed down the road..."

Spill dem beans!

What strategies have you found? My problem right now is that Valendon's Diary does not have enough sense of time passing, because he doesn't write down 'two days later' or even 'two days of this. What a waste of time.'

[jhetley.livejournal.com]

Well, I had Alice (younger Alice) mutter about how they had been as busy as a one-legged man in an ass-kicking contest for the last two days....

For a diary, why don't you just date the damned entries???